The truly terrifying, father of fear, Rami Ungar has tagged me for #FirstLineFriday. Thank you, Rami! This looks loads of fun.
The Rules:
- Write a post called #FirstLineFriday, including the hashtag.
- Explain the rules.
- Share the first line or two of a story idea, work in progress, completed or published tale.
- Encourage readers to comment and take part in #FirstLineFriday. Tagging is fun, but not necessary.
As I’ve almost finished my horror novella, Dead Jimmy, it seems like the perfect time to share its first line.
It’s a bad sign when the police showing up at work to give you bad news is the second most disturbing part of your day.
Tell me readers, what do you think? Does it hook you? Make you want to read more? Tell me all in the comments!
I hope you’ll take part in #FirstLineFriday. If you do, please post your links in the comments, as I’d love to read them.
I’m tagging Jonny from Jaunts and Haunts to take part next Friday. Fingers crossed he’ll post the first line to the sequel to his horror novella, Reaper.
Iseult Murphy 
Reads nice and easy. Some might say two bads, but I say it’s about natural speech patterns and character development. Subtle and clever.
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Good catch! I’m sure it’ll change in the second draft. Thanks, David. 😊
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Don’t that was kind of my point
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Gotcha. Thanks. 😊
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I’m intrigued already!
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Thank you, Priscilla 😊
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Great first line,
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Thank you 😊
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First off, thank you for the flattery. It won’t get you anywhere, but thank you. Second, intriguing opening. I would want to keep reading the story after an opening line like that.
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Muhahaha!
Thank you, Rami 😊
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I like it. I once had six cop cars surround a laundromat to arrest me for stealing quarters. Quite a memorable experience. BTW, I hadn’t stolen any quarters.
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That sounds like the appropriate police response to such a crime.
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Yes. Very reasonable. The police told my roommate and I that he was being very nice by not arresting us. Umm, no? We’re just trying to wash our clothes.
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I’m always thankful that the police don’t arrest me when I’m washing my clothes too.
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I’m intrigued by this opening line too – would definitely read on to see what the worse thing was!
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Thank you 😊
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